"EEEEEK!" shrieks e.e.
Bradmackenzie pleads we poets here,
never employing the single E,
pen exquisite verse, even be there fear
these poems guarantee misery
over hapless readers' heads,
piercing their ears, etching their eyes,
requiring they escalate their meds,
even adversely affecting their lives!
Furthermore, the mackenzie challenge
tests mental fibers we writers expose
creating poesy: stretches the fringe.
hell, he desires we demi-pointe tiptoe.
Beware: meek people speed these E-less lines
lest they freak, even tweak the psyche.
Reckless readers relish these cheeky designs
evoking bradmackenzie's sweet free-wheeling e.e.
you have to shift rhythm to make the feet work on in the middle two stanzas. do you think that's okay? i don't want sing-song absolutely regular beat, but this makes you stumble, doesn't it? suggestions? (such as, ditch rhyme--it sucks)
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maybe i'm missing something,
but i'm absolutely confused by this haha.
is it a satire on using strict meter,
or do you really need help with your meter?
i need to get a better grip on this before i say anything more.
i just noticed that there is an "e"
in every single word.
it might not be one to work with here. just wanted to see if u were jolted by the meter or if it read ok. i only use end rhyme, generally, in my "snarky" poems. :)
the 2nd stanza trips me up more than the 3rd... that's last line of the 2nd stanza just stalls me, for some reason... I had to read it like 3 times just to get past it.
It's amazingly creative, of course, and with the constraints, I don't think you could improve the language much. I guess it's just a flow issue with that 2nd stanza.
oh... and nice to meet you... I'm Bradley Charles McKenzie ;)
sorry about misspelling your name! just twigged that. what a f---up (to use TPS's subtle technique)
btw, the line that i had to really work on without e-less words was:
'hell, he desires we demi-pointe tiptoe.'
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